Wrinkles

Origami swan,
once you were only
a fold
in a paper river.

Now you are winged,
majestic.

Origami swan,
once you were only
a backwater glimpse
in a smile’s crinkle.

Now you are
many beautiful feathers
the unfeatured eyes
never see.

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9 thoughts on “Wrinkles

  1. nectarfizz says:

    Beautiful and very much in your style. I can almost see the swan.

  2. Matt says:

    I’m wasn’t sure when I was about to post this one whether the poem would comes across clearly enough or read a bit cryptic. The swan is meant to be a metaphor for creases around the eyes, the more folds the finer the eye crinkles, the finer the swan.

  3. nectarfizz says:

    lol..I like those too!

  4. Matt says:

    Bekki, I’m still not certain from your comment whether or not you got the poem about aging when you first read it. It would be useful for me to know in case I should make it more understandable. I’m not sure if it is apparent enough.

  5. Uncle Tree says:

    Wrapped in mystery
    The ugly duckling’s old blooms
    Paper tears rivers

    Sorry to say, Matt
    I missed the aging reference
    Feathered features, aye.

  6. Matt says:

    Oh, well. Back to the drawing board then. Thanks, UT. I appreciate the honest haiku feedback. I’ll have to think on this one as to how to make the aging theme more easily seen without spoiling the prettiness of the piece as it were. Hm, not easy.

  7. nectarfizz says:

    I didn’t see it at first. Once you pointed it out I looked again, it starts out well enough, but the unfeatured part really confused me, mostly because crinkles are featured constantly, no way to hide them! Maybe you can reference them by saying “corners like comma’s!” that is, after all, the way I think of those lovely things (but then, I am nuts.)

  8. Matt says:

    The ending lines simply mean that there aew those with unfeatured eyes (i.e unwrinkled) that don’t always appreciate those that do have them. I think you misread the meaning.

  9. nectarfizz says:

    Possibly..but you asked what I didn’t get..lol. I like the explaination. Thanks. I happen to like your crinkles an extreme amount.

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